Thank you for your interest in XYZ Publishing. While your story touches on a subject of interest to many we must decline to accept your work at this time. The opening contained far too much exposition and back story to hold our interest. The frequent retelling of information about the characters identified as judges causes the reader to begin to lose interest almost immediately.
You should know that the excessive use of flash and bling in your presentation does not make boring material more interesting. A more subtle hand would result in your audience wanting more, not less, of what you’re offering.
On a positive note, you do show talent for interesting character development in some cases. Scenes with Melanie Amaro and Stacey Francis indicate you do have talent. Unfortunately, you rushed through a number of scenes that could have added credibility to the story in order to back slide into blatant pandering to what you must believe is a very immature audience. The inclusion of a ridiculous nude scene and the over reaction of a grown woman to the sight of a penis indicates your lack of ability to self edit and cannot be overlooked.
If you plan to continue to market this material we suggest a major rewrite. By being less self-indulgent and focusing more on the strength of your characters you could end up with an interesting and much more appealing piece of work.
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